Monday, April 13, 2009

The Night He Left

As I get closer to my cousin, he looked so pale
I ran to him as my mood is scared
He talked to everyone in one single voice
Saying he will always be there
I looked at him as if I didn't know he was in pain
And asked him are you sure your OK?
He took a deep breath
“please let me see my” dad he said
As my uncle came in, I told him “come quick”
I ran to Sergio helped him up and walked him to his dad
He fell upon him saying, I'm gone
We looked at him,With tears
and our eyes full of fear
He just said “please don’t cry and be Strong tonight”
“once I said I’ll die at night”
And I truly wish it wasn't this time
I looked at him, cried my eyes out
They he laid back
As his soul went away .


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12 comments:

  1. Awwww jacky dat so Sad=(
    it was a very nice poem about ur cousin

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  2. hmm reminds of someon i lost....nice poem must have hurt when you wrote it...

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  3. nice poem. kinda sad but great. :]

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  4. good poem jacky
    its kinda sad but its still good
    i like it though :]

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  5. so sad...did it really happen to someone ?

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  6. it was really sad jacky. but i have the same question a elizabeth had. did it really happen to someone?
    But it was really good. good job. :)

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  7. I like the way you you described it

    :P

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  8. WoW Jacky it is so sad!!! :(

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  9. wow nice poem
    lol it gave the chills
    good job!!

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  10. wow that was rally good..i loved it..nice job..i can picture it in my head

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